Example: book manuscript refinement
The rain had started before dawn, and Mara was able to notice that the road had become more difficult to travel on noticed the road growing harder to travel.
She checked the map again. The village was less than five kilometres away, but the timeline in the previous scene suggests she arrived before sunrise.
By the time the first lights appeared ahead, the road narrowed and the trees closed around her. The sequence now moves more directly from obstacle to action while preserving the scene’s tone.
Editor note: check timeline continuity in Chapter 6.